postr/StutterAugust 18, 2014

Writing a Story with a Stuttering Main Character - I Need Help from r/Stutter to ensure that I do the condition justice!

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Writing a Story with a Stuttering Main Character - I Need Help from r/Stutter to ensure that I do the condition justice! Hi r/Stutter, I'm an aspiring author writing a children's novel. I'm about 40,000 words deep, so the story is coming along nicely. It's a fantasy-esque story about two little boys who find and befriend a dragon that lives in the caves near their respective homes. Meanwhile, a scary organization is trying to catch the dragon for their own dark desires. Although my main protagonist is a non-stutterer, one of the secondary protagonists (the other little boy who finds the dragon and the best friend of my lead protagonist) has a stuttering condition. Although I am not a stutterer, I remember having friends in school who indeed struggled with stuttering and regularly left class to see the school's speech pathologist. This is ultimately my inspiration for the character who stutters, Julio Delgado. Here's where I need your help. I want to bring attention to his stuttering, but I want it to be respectable. This story is ultimately about friendship and the fact that although everyone is different (whether it be white/black/Latina, human/dragon, old/young), everyone should be celebrated for who they are. Because of this, I'm a little torn on how to proceed. I want to acknowledge the stuttering (and do so with the dialogue), but I want to be respective in how I approach the subject. As I am not a stutterer, I would appreciate some advice from any stutterer's out there. Should I call attention to the stuttering from other characters, or simply acknowledge it once (in his introduction) and move on; after all, no one minds his stuttering and it's not his primary attribute. I also want to phonetically write out his stuttering accurately. I'm aware that there are different forms of stammering, varying on where the stuttering occurs and with what particular sounds. I've provided a portion of the first chapter, in which the reader meets Julio, and I showcase several lines of his dialogue. Please feel free to give me input, critique, and anything else you feel would allow me to do this character justice. Thank you all! Here's the excerpt: *Halfway through the article (which spoke of Monty’s favorite player, pitcher Armstrong Lewis), there was a knock on the door. “It must be Julio!” Monty exclaimed, dashing to the door. A moment later Monty was leading Julio into the kitchen. Julio clumsily tripped over his large feet as they entered the room, something he did more often than he preferred.* *“H-h-hi, M-m-m-mister a-and M-m-missus W-Williams.” Julio said politely but with a stutter. Ever since Julio was a baby he had great difficult in speaking. He often stuttered over his words, something starting and stopping entire sentences several times in order to find the words he wanted to say. He often saw a special doctor, called a speech therapist, to help him speak properly. Despite his trouble talking, Monty saw absolutely nothing wrong with Julio. After all, Monty knew that Julio was absolutely no different than him.* *Soon the two boys ran off in pursuit of the kind of adventure only summer can provide. They quickly found themselves pacing about Monty’s yard, which was a finely manicured enclosure on the edge of a large rock face overlooking the city below. At night the lights of Ward City lit up the entire mountainside, looking like a net of twinkling lights and star-shine.* *The boys leaned against the fence throwing rocks over the cliff’s edge. They listened to the *italics*CRACK CAARRRRACK THUMP CRACK*italics* as the rocks tumbled down the rock face.* *“School starts soon.” Monty moaned.* *“Ugh! D-d-on’t r-remind me!” Julio exclaimed with a grimace. For a moment Monty thought Julio was going to add something, but Julio didn’t continue his thought.* *“Is something wrong?” Monty asked curiously.* *“I’m…” Julio began. “Well… I’m… I’m j-just saying that we b-b-better make the b-b-best of today!” Despite his enthusiasm, Monty wondered if Julio didn’t have something more on his mind.* *“I like where your head’s at! This may be our last adventure of the summer! Pretty soon we’re going to be cooped up inside school all the time doing math problems and writing book reports. How boring!”* Thanks again for reading and giving me advice. :)

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